Judgmentals malign sister crow
with whispered gossip
jealous perked in spoiled tea.
She ignores their babble
polluting the wind, and gathers
silhouettes to wallpaper memory.
Spoiled tongues scar faces.
The eye of I is an open window
where what is spoken is always seen.
Beware when attacking a sister,
words carried on feathers
may return in a murder of wings.
©Susie Clevenger 2018
Crow image by pngtree.com
Sooo good! I claim these lines, Susie,
ReplyDelete"The eye of I is an open window
where what is spoken is always seen."
A wsrning, what goes around comes around. That won't be good.
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My goodness this is piercingly gorgeous! I can picture those judgmentals, their jealousy and spoiled tea ☕ and whistled at the closing.💞
ReplyDeleteMen are bad enough, but when patriarchy has gossipy minions, its victory is complete.
ReplyDeleteHow we misused the power of speech so much, it really should be rationed or at least vetted somehow before utterance. Why don't we invent a filter for speech rather than atom bombs or fruitless space travel?
ReplyDeleteEvery line is masterful, Susie.. It had me thinking, I wish I had written this line, that line.. all of it. Excellent.
ReplyDeleteA wonderful write, I know it well....
ReplyDeleteoh how the pen has distilled this poison and offers us a whole new mystical elixir-concoction - except this has such bite and after-kick - it sears as we swallow....
ReplyDeleteas Kerry mentioned, this poem is exceptional - and it's one of those pieces you read, and read again, and then sit and say, wow, I wish I had wordcrafted this .... because it's so potent, so powerful, and the message isn't lost in the beauty of the imagery - which holds its own uniqueness (even as the subject "corvids" has been "done to death" - and so misaligned etc.) This is really just so brilliant Susie!
jealous perked in spoiled tea. Masterfully written.
ReplyDeleteYou can almost see the sharpened beak, the knowing gleam in the eye... crows are clever things with long memories. This piece is as razor sharp as a talon.
ReplyDeleteShe ignores their babble
ReplyDeletepolluting the wind, and gathers
silhouettes to wallpaper memory
Good strategy, Susie, not to be bothered by their babbles but keep in memory for rebuttals later!
Hank
I love the personification in the line 'jealous perked in spoiled tea' and the imagery in the lines:
ReplyDelete'polluting the wind, and gathers
silhouettes to wallpaper memory'.
I also love the message in your wonderful poem, Susie:
'Beware when attacking a sister,
words carried on feathers
may return in a murder of wings'.
Well worded!
ReplyDeletePity the poor fool, who is the target of this crow.
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